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如何让动作描写栩栩如生？

Trick1：Accurate准确性①Thelittleboysaidsorrytohismother.小男孩对他妈妈说对不起。②Thelittleboyhunghisheadandmumbledanapologytohismother.mumble/?m?mb(?)l/小男孩垂着头，咕哝着向他母亲道歉。第一句中“saidsorryto”不带任何感情色彩第二句中使用了具体化的表示“说”的动词mumbled（咕哝）作用：从而使一个不愿意道歉又不得不道歉的小男孩的形象栩栩如生地复现在读者脑海中。摈弃大而泛之词1Discover

ComparePictureaboyontheplaygroundwhohasfallenandcantfindhismother.Theboysfaceisredandstreakedwithtears,andheisgaspingfromcryingsohard.1.streakwithtears(泪痕)2.gasp:totakeaquickdeepbreathwithyourmouthopenWhichisbetterthattheboyiscryingorsobbing?Sobbingismostlikelytoreflectwhichofthefollwingemotions?A.boredomB.excitementC.surpriseD.sadness

Establishpersonalizedwordbanks建立词汇库常见的动作如：哭、笑、说、看、走和跑

Trick2：Specific具体性（1）①Janestoodupandcontinuedtowalkforward.简(Jane)站起来继续前行。②Janestruggledtohisfeetandmovedforwardwithhershakylegs.shaky/??e?ki/颤抖的；颤巍巍Jane艰难地站起来，双腿颤抖着向前走去。③Janestruggledtohisfeet，movingforwardwithhershakylegs.第一句是简单的动作并列。第二句中出自《简爱》的原句：描述了站的力度和幅度，走的伴随状态，即添加了描述动作的状语（时间、地点、伴随、程度、幅度、频度等）。生动地描绘了简在经历痛苦后的坚韧和决心。添加状语（高频副词+介词短语+非谓语）2Discover.a

Compare1.Thewolfalsonoticedthemand?turneditsheadback,shouting?atPaulandBecky.狼也注意到他们，回头朝保罗和贝基大喊大叫。2.Thewolfalsonoticedthemand?fiercely?/?f??sli/turneditsheadback,shouting?loudly?atPaulandBecky.狼也注意到了他们，并凶狠地转过头来，大声对保罗和贝基咆哮。动作与情感描绘：句子中使用了两个副词描述动作“fiercely”和“loudly”生动地描绘了狼的愤怒和威胁。

2.Theboywolfeddownthefood.3.Thebreeze(微风)gentlykissedhercheeks.4.Whensheheardthebadnews,ariveroftearspouredout.Discover.bFigureofspeech修辞手法1.Hestoodstilllikeastone.A.PersonificationB.Metaphor/?met?f?(r)/暗喻C.Hyperbole/ha??p??b?li/夸张D.Simile/?s?m?li/明喻Trick2：Specific具体性（2）添加修辞手法运用

Accumulateandclassify分类整理状语（高频副词+介词短语）

运用和仿写修辞手法积累

Trick3：Process过程化①Shewenttocatchthebutterfly.②Shecreptalongthepath,bentoverswiftlyandcuppedherhandsaroundthebutterflygentl