读后续写【情节篇】
一、两圈一解读情节,四个支点撬要点
1.圈四要素
谁、时间地点、发生了啥、(目前)结果如何
2.圈冲突类型
a.有挫折——自己受到挫折(包括残疾、家庭的贫困、失败、自卑、自负等)
b.有分歧——和别人之间有分歧(包括误会、误解、缺乏信任、性格/喜好/观念不一等)
c.有危险——遇到危险(包括危险的人、危险的动物、危险的环境等)
3.冲突化解方式
1.依靠自己:自己的努力、自己的机灵/灵活...
2.依靠别人:别人的爱、善意、援助、安慰、陪伴......
3.依靠他物:文中提到的物品/工具...
4.依靠自然:人与自然和谐共处...
二、如何回扣原文
首:首段特别的人、事、话、景、情与悬念
高:高频、重复出现的词,多样化表达的信息
细:仿佛“聚焦”了一般的细节描写
尾:前文末尾悬而未决的矛盾点、困难点
【例题】I’dalwaysbeentoldtotakecareofmyolderbrother,Brian,whowasbornweakandsmall.I’doftentiehisshoesorprepareanotherglassofwaterforhim.MymomsawmylargersizeandstrongbodyasasignthatIwastobeakindofguardianangel(守护天使)forBrian.However,thatwasnotthecase.
Onedayourschoolsponsoredapumpkin-carvingcontest.Firstprizewas$100
WhenIhadtocarvetheperfectpumpkinI’dpickedout,itdawnedonmethatwithmybigclumsyfingersI’dsurelyscrewitup(搞砸).IthoughtofBrian’ssmaller,delicatehandsandknewhewasthemanforthejob.IimmediatelybeggedBrian.Unexpectedly,heaskedforacut.Thatwasfifty-fifty.Quicklydoingthemathinmyhead,IfiguredoutevenifIsplit(分摊)thefirstprize,I’dstillhaveenoughcashforthegame.SoIgaveintoBrian’sdemands.WithskillfulhandsBriancarvedtheperfectface,andnowwehadthebestpumpkinever.
Thentheunexpectedhappened:Wecameinsecond.Unfortunately,secondprizewasonly$50
Ifhereallywantedtowin,hewouldhavebeenheretoday,Ithoughttomyself,justifyingstealingthecashfromunderpoorBrian’srunnynose.Withhardlyathought,Irantothestoreandboughtmydreamgame.ThatnightwhenBrianaskedifwehadwon,Idenied,afraidtolookintohiseyes.
ThewholethingwasnevermentionedagainuntilthedaywhenBrianwaspackingforcollege.IplayedmyusualroleinhelpinghimpackwhenIcameacrossanoldalbumfilledwith
photoshehadtakenastheschoolphotographer.
Para1:Iwasenjoyingthephotoswhenonecaughtmyeye.
Para2:Youact