读后续写之
动作描写
简单有效的六个微技能
高考读后续写真题
年份
试卷版本
情节
侧重点
2021.6
新高考ll卷
兄妹俩为妈妈准备早饭
侧重动作描写
2020.7
新高考I卷
帮助贫困家庭解决经济困难
侧重动作描写
2020.7
浙江卷熊口脱险记
侧重动作描写
2020.1
浙江卷主人与宠物狗之间的深厚感情
侧重心理描写
2018.6
浙江卷和父亲去西部荒原度假时，骑
马迷路
侧重环境描写
2017.11
浙江卷
与健忘母亲的旅行趣事
侧重人物性格描写
2017.6
浙江卷和朋友骑行途中遇到狼
侧重动作描写
2016.10
浙江卷Jane在野营时和丈夫走散并
迷路
侧重心理描写和动作描写
如何使动作描写更饱满?
感知：结合语境，如何优化表达?
1.Becauseofhislies,shelookedathim.
Becauseofhislies,sheglaredathim.
2Withonlytwentysecondsleft,Irantotheline.
Withonlytwentysecondsleft,Irush/dashedtotheline.
3.Withonlytwominutesleft,heatehismeal.
Withonlytwominutesleft.Heswalloweduphismeal.
4.Sheheardhermothersayquietlyasshewalkeddownthehall,
Dontwakeyourdadup.
Sheheardhermotherwhisperedasshetiptoeddownthe
hall,Dontwakeyourdadup.
generalwords(笼统词)
walk
run
look
say/talk
cry
eat
concretewords(具体词)
concretewords(具体词)
tiptoe(蹑手蹑脚地走)dash/rush(猛冲)
glance(瞥见)glare(怒视)stare(凝视)
chat(闲聊)whisper(耳语)
generalwords(笼统词)
walk
run
look
say/talk
weep/sob(啜泣)
bite(咬)chew(咀嚼)swallow(吞下)
cry
eat
start/begin
getdowntodoing
decide
makeuponesmind
cry
burstintotears
remember
keepinmind
tired
wornout
see
catchsightof
sharp/bloody/frightening/scary/terrible
●ThefiercewolfstaredatMacwithitsteeth.
Immediately/Instantly/Hurriedly/Breathlessly
dashedintothecar.
●Asthehungrywolfwasalmostreachinghim,Macseyeswerewideopen
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Skill3:
添加介词短语/副词修饰动作
_(adv),hejumpedoffthebicycleand
infear/panic/horror/shock
探究
_.(in/with+名词)
动作描写语料库
拥抱
hug/embrace
感知
把动作过程分解成一连串的动作，构造动作链，让你的动作描写既丰富又生动!
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